"" Air Pollution ""
Air is the ocean we breathe .It is the natural mixture of gases that surround the Earth. It is 99.9% nitrogen, oxygen,water vapor and inert gases. It supplies us with oxygen which is essential for our bodies to live. Unfortunately ,with increasing urbanisation and industrialisation,humans started to release more wastes into the atmosphere than nature could cope with ,which cause Air Pollution that have harmed the environment .
The specific contaminants that cause Air Pollution are varied and plentiful. On the one hand , there are the industrial or mechanical sources such as factories. Anything burned in a factory ,not just for heat but as part of the manuafacturing process, would release smoke ,ashe and other toxins into the air which cause air pollution. Another serious cause of air pollution has been the increasing use of automobiles and other modern modes of transport that rely on the burning of fossil fuels for example the black exhaust that comes from buses, semis and other large vehicles. On the other hand, there are the environmental or natural sources such as wildfires,dust storms and volcanic erruptions which may be accompanied by poisonous gases.
According to what mentioned before ,air pollution has serious implications for our health as well as for the whole environment. Its effects can include the irritation to the eyes, nose and throat.Other symptoms can include headaches ,nausea and allergic reactions. It also can include chronic respiratory disease, lung cancer, heart disease and even damage the brain,nerves,liver or kidneys.
Air pollutants such as ozone, nitrogen oxides and sulfur dioxide also have harmful effects on natural ecosystems. They can kill plants and trees by destroying their leaves, and can kill animals especially fish in highly polluted rivers. It also can contribute to global warming that changes climate globally and causes significant changes to various regions of the world for example ocean warming, rising sea levels and increasing runoff.
As air pollution is very harmful to our environment and to our health, it requires international cooperative efforts to find solutions in order to stop the damage to our environment from this big risk. People may try to restrict population growth, use less energy , improve energy efficiency ,reduce waste and move to non-polluting renewable forms of energy production. Also automobile-produced pollution can be decreased with highly beneficial results.Restricting smoking is an important key to the healthier environment and finally we must plant more plants which are instrumental in removing carbon monoxide from the air.
In conclusion,I would say that the fresh environment is very important for this planet Earth and it shouldn't be destroyed nor damaged in any way . without air Earth would be unable to sustain life because air is the source of life and it helps keep things alive and powers the planet.So we must do our best to prevent the damaging effects of Air pollution and improve our Air .......

hey ya fanfan..I read yur draft and I found it excellent
ردحذفthanks alot emy
ردحذفwell done Afnan go ahead
ردحذفAn excellent essay but try to correct the following mistakes
ردحذفAir is the ocean we breathe (wrong meaning)
Air Pollution that have (has not have )
The specific contaminants (use a simpler word)that cause Air Pollution(no capitalization) are varied and plentiful.
manuafacturing (wrong spelling)
comes from buses, semis (what does it mean) and other large
volcanic eruptions(wrong spelling) which may be accompanied by poisonous
As air pollution is very harmful to our environment and to our health, it requires international cooperative efforts to find solutions in order to stop the damages (it cause) to our environment from this big risk (rearrange this sentence, wrong structure).
People may try to restrict population growth by use (ing) less energy , improve(ing) energy efficiency ,reduce(ing) waste and move(ing) to non-polluting renewable forms
Restricting smoking is an important key to the healthier environment. (start a new sentence here) and finally we must plant more plants which
In conclusion,I would say that the fresh environment is very important for (this planet) Earth and it shouldn't be destroyed nor damaged (in any way) .
without air(put a comma ,) Earth
So (put a comma, )we must do
nice draft ya fony, I think you should use more punctuation, your sentences and words are clear, some sentences sre long try to divide them.
ردحذفHi feno. i liked ur draft.it is well developed and u succeeded in illustrating ur ideas,but u've been using technical words which make it little difficult to understand the sentence ,u also misspelt (manuafacturing) and u should take care of punctuating ur essay.good luck and keep working hard
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Hi fony . your work is very good . The sentences are clear and direct . The essay has a clear and concise main idea ,but some words are difficult to understand. keep working fony and good luck
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